I believe in myself. I believe that at the end of hard day the most relaxing and easiest thing to be at the moment is to be myself. With the trials that each day bring I learn something knew that adds to the list of characteristics that describe me. Ever since I can remember I have been stuck between what I want to be and who I am. I know I want to be some outrageously successful surgeon and donate as much money as I spend. And every negative aspect of my childhood and adolescent years I want to change for my children which can only happen through success, as I see it. My Dad has beleived in me even when I did not and encourages me to always beleive in who I am and what I want to be. I want to be success. I believe in success and I believe in myself. That’s what I want to be but right now I am a hard working student and do not quite know how to manage my time, but I always somehow end up finishing everything I need to. As each year passes I believe in myself more and more and stop obsess sing with being someone else with every other person I am with and have learned to simply believe what I stand for- my family, values, and morals- believe where I come from , believe what I write and believe in myself.
My Dad has influenced me the most to work hard now and reap the benefits later. He has taught me to never give up and never be afraid to be who I am. Through his encouragement, I am definitely his protégé and I make him proud by living life the way he wants all his children too. He has been the one person who sways me the most to believe in who I am and all I have to offer. He has helped make me a generous, loving, crazy, determined, open-minded, independent, and successful person- a person that I believe in.
I have spent numerous hours of each day trying to be something I am not because I think that something is better than what I am. I learn though, that after I stop trying to use big words that I always fail to use correctly, I write better than I ever have before. When I realize the easiest thing to be in life- the thing that will get you trough any hard time- is to be yourself. I love to eat, I don’t care if I am size 4-6. I want to be a surgeon, I don’t care if you don’t think I can. I want to marry someone who loves me more than imaginable, I don’t care if it takes all my life. I want to help millions of people, I don’t care if it’s impossible. I want to be myself, I don’t care if you think this is a cheesy ending. Because I believe in what I say, what I write, what I know- I believe in myself.
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My Dad has influenced me the most to work hard now and reap the benefits later. He has taught me to never give up and never be afraid to be who I am. Through his encouragement, I am definitely his protégé and I make him proud by living life the way he wants all his children too. He has been the one person who sways me the most to believe in who I am and all I have to offer. He has helped make me a generous, loving, crazy, determined, open-minded, independent, and successful person- a person that I believe in.
I have spent numerous hours of each day trying to be something I am not because I think that something is better than what I am. I learn though, that after I stop trying to use big words that I always fail to use correctly, I write better than I ever have before. When I realize the easiest thing to be in life- the thing that will get you trough any hard time- is to be yourself. I love to eat, I don’t care if I am size 4-6. I want to be a surgeon, I don’t care if you don’t think I can. I want to marry someone who loves me more than imaginable, I don’t care if it takes all my life. I want to help millions of people, I don’t care if it’s impossible. I want to be myself, I don’t care if you think this is a cheesy ending. Because I believe in what I say, what I write, what I know- I believe in myself.
Word Count: 492
2 comments:
I believe in you...and your beautiful picture! That picture sums up your entire post! GREAT JOB!
I really like, but I think that you should make some changes (most which we discussed in class).
1. I think that you should not use so many simple sentences; while the paper is supposed to be casual, it sounds a little choppy if you use a lot of simple sentences.
2. I think that you should introduce your dad in the beginning and make the entire essay more coherent. Give us something to look forward to and outline your essay, so to speak, with examples of why and how you believe in yourself (your dad's influence, etc)
3. I really like the ending and think that it is very honest. Nothing needs to be changed there.
AWESOME OPOSSUM!
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